Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because university education only benefits students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Scholarships can be a huge support for
students
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in order to complete their studies at university. Some
people
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argue that
students
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ought to pay
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the expenses of studying
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due
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because
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to university
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would
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return benefits only to
students
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not to the entire
society
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. I
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disagree with
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statement. In
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essay, I will discuss how supporting and encouraging
students
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by taking over some cost of their
study
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studies
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have benefits
in
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for
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the whole community.
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with, nowadays, costs for
further
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study are a bit expensive and not everyone can afford it ,and if there is no aid financial to cover their expenses for
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ultimately,
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can
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to a significant reduction in the number of graduates.
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, in the industry arena will not get great quality among employees or
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that role in the companies
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the lack of background and
the
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knowledge
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of what they are working.
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, the business will be under threat
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down
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to
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its
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constantly.
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, as much as
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affects business and companies as will affect the economy of the country,
in particular
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in
society
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such
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as
,
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the prices of goods will experience a
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rise.
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, the lack of graduate
people
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in the community would have a bit of
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in the level of consciousness and
knowledge
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of
society
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.
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, these days,
knowledge
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is quite crucial for adults and kids too, if the parents do not have the
knowledge
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or basics in
education
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,
thus
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they cannot help their child
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doing homework and
guide
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them or
give
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giving
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them advice for some
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study.
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,
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cannot gain a good result probably children will not get the motivation to
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follow their dreams and do whatever they want, as much as a parent is the most
people
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that can encourage the young
people
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.
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,
students
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should not cover all the costs of
further
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education
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in university
due to
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many drawbacks, consist in
society
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and in individuals.
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