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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #students #ability
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In recent times,
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 competition is becoming tougher and tougher.
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 led to several different takes on how
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 should be taught in school. Some people believed that young
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 should be taught based on their academic ability
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, some argue that they should be taught altogether. There are some benefits to grouping and teaching children together. One of these benefits is that
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 who are sensitive to peer pressure are less likely to feel isolated from their friends when they study.
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, if poor-performing
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 are separated from the high performing
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 they may feel abandoned which may lead to
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 developing mental and psychological problems that may have a negative impact on the future. On one hand, segregating
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 based on their academic capability have some advantages.
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 division will help them when they enter the
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 market. We are currently in a time where there is a cut-throat
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 competition and
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 need higher academic credentials to survive in
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 competitive environment. When
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 of varying intellectual levels are grouped into one, educators will not be able to teach effectively because the level of understanding of the subject will be different among
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.
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, if
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 with different intellectual skills are grouped together, the educator may not be able to spend more time on any specific student who needs more help.
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 kind of grouping will only create mediocre
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 who will struggle in securing a well-paying
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. In conclusion, there may be advantages to educating
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 altogether
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, I strongly believe that segregating them based on their academic skills will be more beneficial.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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