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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent times,
job
 competition is becoming tougher and tougher.
This
 led to several different takes on how
students
 should be taught in school. Some people believed that young
learners
 should be taught based on their academic ability
however
, some argue that they should be taught altogether. There are some benefits to grouping and teaching children together. One of these benefits is that
students
 who are sensitive to peer pressure are less likely to feel isolated from their friends when they study.
However
, if poor-performing
students
 are separated from the high performing
students
 they may feel abandoned which may lead to
learners
 developing mental and psychological problems that may have a negative impact on the future. On one hand, segregating
students
 based on their academic capability have some advantages.
This
 division will help them when they enter the
job
 market. We are currently in a time where there is a cut-throat
job
 competition and
students
 need higher academic credentials to survive in
this
 competitive environment. When
students
 of varying intellectual levels are grouped into one, educators will not be able to teach effectively because the level of understanding of the subject will be different among
learners
.
However
, if
students
 with different intellectual skills are grouped together, the educator may not be able to spend more time on any specific student who needs more help.
Therefore
this
 kind of grouping will only create mediocre
learners
 who will struggle in securing a well-paying
job
. In conclusion, there may be advantages to educating
students
 altogether
however
, I strongly believe that segregating them based on their academic skills will be more beneficial.
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