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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is often believed that teaching a kid on being a good member of
society
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 is a parent's job.
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, some may argue that it is the educational institution's task to do
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. Some people believed schools are the best place in learning different skills on how to be a good member of
society
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. One of the reasons why
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 view is widely normalized nowadays is because students spend most of their time in school and some
children
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 may not have adequate time spent with their
parents
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 as both
parents
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 might be employed. The schools must
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 include teaching various qualities that will aid in moulding the
children
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 into becoming good standing
members
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 of the
society
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. Some examples of these values are performing their duties correctly and following instructions. On one hand, others believe that it is the
parents
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' job to teach kids how to be a good
member
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 of the community. In general,
children
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 mimic their family
members
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 and the people they are surrounded with the most.
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parents
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 should be mindful of the actions they do and the moral values they instil in their
children
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. Another thing is that
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 are often the
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 people who teach young kids responsibility and to obey rules and instructions. An example of
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 is my younger brother who was raised by my mom alone and he respects women more than the kids the same age as him as he knows how to treat a girl right. In conclusion, schools may have the capability to teach
children
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 how to be good
members
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 of
society
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 and
parents
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 too have the responsibility to instil good moral values and actions in
children
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. Personally, I believe that
parents
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 are the ones who should be teaching young ones on becoming good
members
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 of the community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • moral values
  • social norms
  • structured environment
  • cooperation
  • respect
  • communal responsibilities
  • decision-making
  • societal integration
  • consistent messages
  • cultural expectations
  • complementary roles
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