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The Internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet and what solution can you suggest?

#internet #information
It is true that with the advancement of technology, the
internet
 has made life
people
 easy
and
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transfers facts easily and is reliable
whereas
 it has some drawbacks which result in
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disaster. In
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 ,essay I will cover the solution and problems created by the
internet
.
To begin
 with, every person is on social media and wants to become a public figure in the crowd on platforms
such
 as Instagram
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Facebook and many more which later become a problem for them.
For Instance
, many photographs of
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celebrities are clicked by the media and
been
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shared on
the
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social media, fake news is posted as well on sites by
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people
 who do not like them creating fake
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 leads to
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their personality and
then
 later being disrespected by the
people
.
In addition
, children are easily targeted by hackers by sending fake friend requests and trying to threaten them for money.
Moreover
, the Digital transfer of money which is fast but not safe can easily trap
people
 on the web by providing offers or huge discounts on money transfers internationally can put them into problems. Every problem has a solution same goes with
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technology, there are some solutions which can help youngsters to get fooled by the person
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by installing Anti-virus protection helps to secure important documents and prevent scams on the
internet
.
To sum up
,
Internet
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 has both pros and cons but, with the proper knowledge and ,installation some protections can prevent many problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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