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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of online learning.

Most of the
classes
 have been organized on the
internet
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 nowadays especially, after the corona worldwide
epidemic
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. Online
classes
 have some benefits like taking part in
classes
 wherever and everywhere it is organized and saving
the
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time
, but
it
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has
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 some drawbacks. Online
classes
 have lots of advantages. The first is that most
people
 can participate in the
classes
,
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 since they do not care about the place and
time
.
People
 can take part in
classes
 from everywhere, even in different cities and countries, who are not given some subjects can attend or even if they are at work.
In addition
, saving
time
 is another positive point. When
classes
 are on the
internet
people
 will not waste their
time
 on traffic to get to the classroom and they can stay at home and will not need to ride a taxi or other public vehicles anymore. The
time
 will be saved and used for useful activities.
In contrast
, there are some negative points namely efficiency will be decreased because teachers usually can not control students and their homework.
Besides
 students do not take
classes
 seriously and they do not study well during the
time
, the results will be somebody with less information and uneducated
people
 .
Moreover
, most
people
 may not have fast
internet
 to attend
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online
classes
 because many areas still
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 good
internet
 connections and
the
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special facilities so they will face lots of problems at the
classes
.
For example
, some exams and
classes
 might be lost or lessons will not be understood. In conclusion,
while
 online learning brought lots of benefits
but
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negative aspects like its effectiveness and the requirements should be noticed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • fluency
  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
  • enhance
  • cross-cultural communication
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