Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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technology has been enhancing our day to day life.
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Wherever communities have many types of computer-based materials which are assisted to improve their life in a better manner. Even though some people argued that it has
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detrimental effects on individuals as well as the society.
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statement and eventually, I will give my opinion.
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with, wherever the public is using social media apps without their control.
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, individuals are trying to utilize increasingly their free time with these platforms.
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, most of the time children were punished by their parents because they
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about their worst demeanour and dedication to their education as they used Facebook,
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digital access in daily routines without thinking about their learnings and families.
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,it takes them self-centred and they automatically become selfish personalities.
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, they try to live isolated band become a victim
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destructive methods.
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, society has the biggest impact which
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of social media.
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, some negative minded humans are attempting to spread fraud and controversial information among the community.
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, people who want to break the peace among different religious groups in society put hatred posts and viedios.
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, it would make brutal incidents and the public would not be able to make their life easier. In conclusion, from my perspective, I believe that certainly, social media apps have
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inferior effect on
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person and a group of citizens.
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, Unless we become aware, makes serious problems
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them. If we have the capability to utilize
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apps in a productive way , can achieve our goals and have a chance to improve our standard lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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