A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or two pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter describe the benefits of sponsoring the sport team. Summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts. And say how you think the company should spend the money.

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Dear Sir Yadegari, Hello, How are you? I wish everything could be all right. I've been writing

this

letter to say thank you for your society's responsibilities. My son is a member of the

children

's sports team and when he heard about your sponsor for their team, he couldn't stop his crying. As you understand, our sports team needs to buy some new equipment for training new

children

and we don't have any money to spend on buying. But now, we can buy them and it would be attractive for

children

, so the courage to do exercise and it useful for their health.

also

, they can change their lifestyle by doing exercise.

Although

, I heard about your payment for two open-air concerts. It is a fantastic idea for all my local people. Because

children

and their family and friends could have a fun time together.it has worth it for us. I recommended , that the best way for paying is a contract with their managers. And I suggest you, is better to pay in per month to them. Many people are happy about your community services, and I know they wanted to support your products more than before. It's clear to us that you are a successful businessman and our people never forget your favour. Thanks and regard, Mozhde Zand.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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10 paragraphs

220 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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