People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group that they belong to than any other factors. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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people
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group to determine shopping
habits
than any other elements' has become a source of major controversy in the general public.
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my way of thinking,
i
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am inclined to believe that
age
is important, but other factors
also
play an important role in
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people
's shopping
habits
On the one hand, there
are
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numerous
reason
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reasons
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why
individual's
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an individual's
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groceries
habits
depend more on the
age
group. The
first
one is that the demand
of
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buying things of
age
groups
are
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different.
For example
, in terms of
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the youngster
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youngster
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youngsters
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,
they
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apply
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often desire to buy
foods
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food
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, drinks, games or something
are
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related to entertainment,
therefore
they frequently visit
supermarket
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supermarkets
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or
shop
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shops
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. Regarding
working
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the working
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population mostly from 30-50, they have the habit go shopping in the late afternoon, time that they just finish their tasks at
company
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. On the flip side,
people;s
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shopping
habits
also
rely on other factors.
Firstly
, youngsters or adults often devote a lot of time
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working and they suffer from a lot of pressure. As the result, they sometimes go shopping to enhance
the
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spiritual prospect.
Secondly
, they want to show off their status and prove to everyone that they are affluent. But
for
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the aged
people
,
they
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do not have
much
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chances like youngsters to make new friends.
Therefore
, doing shopping in
crowed
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places is the only way for them to create new relationships and gossip with them. Having all the aforementioned arguments,
i
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would conclude that
people
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shopping
habit
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habits
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not only depend on
age
group but
also
other elements like
spirit
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a spirit
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or making friends
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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