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Smacking children is the best form of discipline to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Educating children is getting more and more troublesome as the distracting items are for more increased in number nowadays. Some are of the opinion that slapping or hitting pupils is a method of choice to use while teaching them. I believe it is a completely inappropriate way
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 I highly disagree with
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 view. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my thoughts behind my view. Violence has never been the correct answer for our problems, especially the troubles we have with our kids. Smacking our kids for not behaving well may have a number of negative impacts on the life of our children.
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 of all, getting a hit from his parent would make the kid feel unsuccessful not only for that
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 but
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 rest of his life
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, he would not motivate himself to improve
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, and he ends up punishing himself for every single mistake he does.
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, experiencing a childhood with memories of beating and slapping by their parents or teachers would highly affect the future social relationships of that child. To detail, as he would be used to being hit by people, his tendency to become a violent citizen may admittedly be higher than the rest.
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 to that, poorly treat children are unfortunately but evidently much more prone to have psychiatric diseases in their future lives. To conclude, even if they do not turn out to be a bully, they still experience minor behavioural disorders which will surely affect their friendships. In conclusion, I believe, smacking should never be regarded as a way of education since that action has a bunch of possible negative impacts on the child's life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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