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Some people suggest that international news should study as a subject in secondary school. However, others say that it will be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #news #study #school #waste #time
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Nowadays, people long to know, beyond the boundaries of their countries. After globalisation
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 is vital to know about essential global
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, international
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 affects the economy of any country directly, or indirectly. If high schools start, teaching about foreign
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, it will be beneficial, for the economy of the country because pupils develop a trait to read the worldwide
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 during their breakfast, and easily bifurcate the essential broadcast from the bucket of world
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. They will
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 do some preparation in advance if they know about the inflation coming from intercontinental markets.
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, most of us find
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 suggestion worthless, as it kills the precious time
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 class. Many reports already say that the pupils of high schools are already overburdened, and it is not a good idea if you put one more unnecessary
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 because of a baseless theory. The people in favour of that
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, most of them are associated with newsrooms, either they are editors or anchors. In my conclusion, it is not a great idea to put an unnecessary burden on the student, but there are many students who love to read
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 journals.
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 there is an option for both of them, the principal of the school take an opinion from the pupils
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, secondary student differentiate between good, and bad, after that, they will send the result to the policymaker, but
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 is a time taking process. Policymakers launch
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 as an additional
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 will
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 give additional choice to the students and will help them to decide their future purpose.
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