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Nowadays,courses and general study online are getting very popular. However, some people still prefer attending classes in person. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#courses #study #people #classes #person
In the Modern era. internet is playing a
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 why
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 growing really popular
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these days ,
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 the youth but still there are many
people
 who believe that
offline
classes
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online courses. we will discuss both views in the
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 upcoming paragraphs.
First
 and
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foremost
for most
,
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online
classes
 are easy to access through the internet and it
also
 saves time and the cost of travel as well.
Moreover
,
people
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help anytime and they can study at their home .
Besides
 that, online
classes
 are cheaper and eco-friendly because
people
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don't
 need to buy a
paperbook
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paper book
 and
also
 the modern world is
also
 called the digital world where you can do almost everything online .
Secondly
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another point of view is that some
people
 who are really used to
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offline
 or
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in class
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experience
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 hard time
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studying online courses .
Moreover
 ,
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in class
in-class
 studies are really helpful for the students to focus on their studies
becuase
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because
 of the environment and
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. Asides it
also
 helps students in their social life as well like making more friends. In conclusion , every
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 has its own thrones so both online and the
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classes
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 their own merits and demerits points which we have seen above and in my point of
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 the
offline
classes
 are much better than online courses because of few distractions.
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