The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed. But it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problem associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?
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the invention
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the internet
internet
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to
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communications and transforming data are easier than before. In fact, it can be said technology revolutionized Correct article usage
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in
the world. Change preposition
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Although
each revolution has impacts on environment
. One of the main reasons Add an article
the environment
of
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for
internet
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the internet
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and another one is related to time
waste. The best solutions are related to managing works
and police duties
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work
expansion
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people
have to match themselves with technology. and for this
work
they have to create many accounts on Add a comma
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internet
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the internet
specially
on social media networking sites. In Replace the word
especially
this
way sites usually get many information
from people
for instance
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interests
information
. This
information
put us on
danger because hackers can abuse Change preposition
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from
our data and do identify Change preposition
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theft
. In addition
. the sites that we had mentioned before, could be addicted
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addictive
people
and increases our waste time
dramatically.
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of time
people
have to do for
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to
prevent
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prevention
of
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identify
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identity
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their Wrong verb form
sharing
information
in their accounts and increase security with
using different passwords for each account. Change preposition
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addition
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people
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time
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people
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in
24 hours for each app and after that Change preposition
of
time
accessibility to apps
are
limited and you can manage your Correct subject-verb agreement
is
time
.
In conclusion, time
waste and identify
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identity
theft
are absolutely important nowadays. People
have to increase their account’s security by their passwords and manage their time
with special apps
to prevent of
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apply
time wasting
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time-wasting
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