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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed. But it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problem associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

#internet #information
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 of
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internet
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 the world transformed
to
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 a village globe because
the
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communications and transforming data are easier than before. In fact, it can be said technology revolutionized
in
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the world.
Although
 each revolution has impacts on
environment
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. One of the main reasons
of
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internet
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the internet
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 is related to
identify
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theft
 and another one is related to
time
 waste. The best solutions are related to managing
works
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 and police duties With technology
expansion
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people
 have to match themselves with technology. and for
this
work
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 they have to create many accounts on
internet
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specially
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 on social media networking sites. In
this
 way sites usually get many
information
 from
people
for instance
 their name, picture, mobile phone,
interesting
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 and bank account
information
.
This
information
 put us
on
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 danger because hackers can abuse
from
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our data and do identify
theft
.
In addition
. the sites that we had mentioned before, could be
addicted
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 for most
people
 and increases our waste
time
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 dramatically. One of the main actions which
people
 have to do
for
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prevent
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of
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identify
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identity
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theft
 is related to do not
share
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 their
information
 in their accounts and increase security
with
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 using different passwords for each account.
In
addition
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people
 could use some
apps
is
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designed for managing
time
. In these
apps
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people
 can
definition
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 a limited
time
in
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 24 hours for each app and after that
time
 accessibility to
apps
are
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 limited and you can manage your
time
 . In conclusion,
time
 waste and
identify
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identity
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theft
 are absolutely important nowadays.
People
 have to increase their account’s security by their passwords and manage their
time
 with special
apps
 to prevent
of
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time wasting
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time-wasting
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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