Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is true that most of the authorities in most
countries
have a goal
for
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improving
economy
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the economy
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of their
countries
as it is very important from their perspectives.
However
, some citizens point out that other various categories are as important as economic progress.
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my opinion, I strongly believe
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the latter and discuss both of these views in
this
essay.
First
of all, governments have a tendency to do whatever it takes to enhance the
economy
since they already believed that money is the most powerful source that can solve anything which might be related to any other types of progress and upgrade the standard
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of livings
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livings
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living
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of
citizenry
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the citizenry
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of their
countries
.
Also
, if wars happened between
countries
,
countries
with stable financial
supports
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would likely
to
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have a better chance to win or
to stay
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out of the conflict zones.
Moreover
, it is undeniable that if
economy
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of one country was great, the salaries of the people would be high and
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unemployment
rates would
be low
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which is one of the best qualifications of
great
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a great
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country.
On the other hand
, opponents of
this
phenomenon highlight that
physical
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and mental health of the people are more important than money. if ones
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in
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physically or mentally, they can surely not work well which can result in falling in productivity and creativity that can
casue
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cause
the declining effects on
economy
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.
Furthermore
,
war
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a war
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which is the most
distrubing
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disturbing
and
dispointing
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disappointing
thing is the root of
economy
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the economy
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because
countries
invaded each other since poverties in their
countries
made them
to
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conquer
others
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lands, resources and etc. To conclude, I pen down saying that both sides have
it's
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own pros and cons,
however
,
economy
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has more demerits rather than merits so we can't possibly consider that it is the most important goal.
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