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the importance of biodiversity is being more recognised as increasing numbers of species come under threat what can be done to mantain biodiversity?

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Nowadays, the number of endangered
animals
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 is shouting significantly. So, many people have started to speak about the importance of
biodiversity
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 and how crucial is to maintain it.
This
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 essay will address two approaches through which
biodiversity
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 can be protected.
Firstly
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, the elevation of the public awareness of the importance of
biodiversity
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 plays a vital role.
This
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 approach can be achieved through the launching of many public workshops to educate the people about the serious consequences that might occur in case our plant loses its
biodiversity
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. One of the complications is the extinction of one
species
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 can jeopardize the balance of the entire food chain which
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 leads to the extinction of
further
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species
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.
As a result
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 of raising people’s awareness, their reckless behaviour toward
animals
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such
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 as shouting
rare
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species
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 and killing them to profit from their fur or skin will considerably decrease. A
second
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 approach is taken by the governments and authorities. They should make an actual movement to protect the endangered
animals
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 by building and constructing numerous animal sanctuaries and national parks mimicking the actual habitat so rare
animals
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 can feed and breed safely without any threat from a predator or a greedy human.
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, in my country, there is a massive animal sanctuary called Al-Dinder park, which contains a variety of animal
species
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 brought from the wild environment to protect them. In conclusion, in order to preserve the
biodiversity
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 of the earth, a collaboration between the community and the government should occur in terms of elevation society’s awareness and construction of safe places where
animals
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 can be protected.

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