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Some people think climate change has a negative impact on business, while others think that it provides more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that global climate change negatively impacts businesses
due to
 stricter regulations and environmental taxes imposed by the government. I have,
however
, a different point of view that environmental changes create more opportunities for companies to innovate and grow. In
this
 essay, I would like to demonstrate several rationales to support my opinion in depth and detail. To start with, individuals can open new markets or find new materials to adapt to environmental changes. Take Tesla
for instance
. At
first,
when it was launched, most people doubted if it was too early to use the technology of electric automobiles in real life, or not.
Nevertheless
, lots of government legislation and taxes on gasoline vehicles and their manufacturers decreased the sales of fossil-fueled motors, and on top of
this
, to be more specific, the benefits of electric or hybrid cars, as well, accelerated the company to flourish in global markets.
As a result
, it has become one of the biggest corporations in the world, nowadays. Another example, plus, is compostable containers and cutlery markets. With expanding prohibitions on plastic bags or food containers used in restaurants, scientists are studying to develop or find more environmentally friendly materials, and many companies are trying to invent new products from those results.
Last
 but not least, planetary warming affects agriculture in a beneficial way, too. I admit that it may seem like because of global warming
Due to
 global warming and increased amounts of rain every year, Korea becomes closer to tropical weather, which encourages plenty of farmers to invest in tropical fruits we could not cultivate in the past,
such
 as bananas or oranges.
Thus
, it activates the domestic produce market more than before. When all is said and done, I strongly believe that global climate change, rather favourably, influences on economy. It is not just because it encourages innovation across industries and generates new trials, but
also
 because it can widen the range of domestic crops in a country.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph smoothly transitions into the next to enhance the overall flow.
task achievement
Some sentences can be refined for clearer expression. Watch out for minor syntax issues, such as the abrupt sentence 'I admit that it may seem like because of global warming.'
task achievement
The essay provides relevant examples like Tesla and compostable cutlery, effectively supporting the points.
coherence cohesion
Clear opinion is stated at the beginning, providing a solid introduction to guide the reader on your stance.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion successfully reinforces the main argument by linking it back to the discussed examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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