Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and Education? Or is it the responsibilities of the government of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves?

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It is now a debatable issue whether
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influential
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are meant to distribute their
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to some
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that are less privileged in terms of
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and study. Or if the authorities of those
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should be held responsible for taking
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of their natives as regards
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feeding and studying. I totally agree with the
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that
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,
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that governments
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care
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for their
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themselves as
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will curb embezzlement of public funds and as well encourages maximum participation in discharging their duties. On one hand, it is the right of the people to be taken
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of by their authorities using the country's
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no matter how negligible
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those
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money
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they realize from natural mineral resources, forestry and taxes that are being
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by the individuals.The main reason for collecting tax from the
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is to raise
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for their growth and comfortability in the nation,and in a situation where
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is implemented, it will drastically reduce the rate at which the masse's
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are
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being stolen.
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,
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and
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is seen as an integral part of every individual that exists on planet earth. Without
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, there will be no growth while
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is the key to
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brighter productive future developments,and when these are neglected,the nation tends to experience
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every of its enterprise because they have diverted some of the
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meant for the natives to better their lives for their own personal gains especially when the aim using those funds for the masse's
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and feeding were not actualized.
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, authorities have mushrooming dividends for a genre of sectors in their administration, that
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care
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of their
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citizens
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needs.
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, in Nigeria,there is a ministry of
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and agriculture that takes
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of everything concerning feeding in the country, making sure that
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are availability and accessibility of
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throughout the year. When they are allowed to take
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of their
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,it tends to widen their
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as
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ensures maximum participation as each sector has recognized their responsibilities and can go
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mile to deliver as he believes that the mantle is on his shoulder.
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,when other wealthy nations are allowed to distribute their
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in taking
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of poor
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countries
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education
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and
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,it tends to promote over dependency and encourages stealing of available public funds as they will depend solely on foreign
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countries
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aid in taking
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of their responsibilities. Recent research made by professor Soyinka
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suggested that
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productivity and bad governance we experience witness today in our country are prompted by
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on other international bodies for help on what should be their sole responsibility. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it will be more advantageous
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if the governments will take
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of their
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themselves as
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will limit
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the stealing
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of the masse's
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and encourages them to maximize their full potential in taking
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of their duties in the nation. 377words
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