Some people think that we live in a society where money and posessions are given too much importance. Others believe that this is improving our lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In

the

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contemporary society,

materalism

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materialism

and capitalism are the main themes in our everyday lives. Some believe the significance of

money

has been overemphasised; while others thought that

this

can substantially improve our standard of living. In

this

essay, I shall put forth both sides of the discussion and give my own opinion on

this

issue.

Money

is an important part of our everyday lives. It goes without saying that

money

is essential for everyday living, including paying bills, providing necessities like food and drinks, and for various services we need.

Moreover

, capitalism can bring

in

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wealth

for

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the

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society. Tax for goods and other services provide revenue for the community, which in turn, can help develop various industries like commerce, manufacturing and retailing.

This

will boost

employement

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employment

rates and sharpen the competitive edge of our society,

thus

improving

standard

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the standard

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of living for its citizens.

However

, I

also

believe

money

has been

overate

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. The primary reason is

because

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that

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there are many things which cannot be achieved with

money

.

Although

money

is extremely powerful and useful, some essentials simply cannot be purchased. Health and happiness are some striking examples which cannot be bought even with

abundance

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the abundance

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of wealth.

Furthermore

, love and care from friends and family members are priceless, and no amount

cash

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of cash

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can replace

this

.

Thus

, it is obvious that we should not attach

to

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too

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much value to

money

and wealth. In conclusion,

money

has many advantages but it cannot be viewed as omnipotent. I am inclined to believe,

apart

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that apart

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from

money

, health, happiness, love and care

also

play strong roles and we should not place too much importance on

money

and possession.