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The mass media, including TV, radio and newspapers, influences our society and shapes our opinions and characters. What is your opinion?

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 new world of Eras, due to advancements in technology ,
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media
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 sources are available in every home.
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media
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 plays a crucial role to spread information across the world.
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 some information provided by
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 sources
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 as T.v, radio and newspapers greatly
influences
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 the minds of the
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. In my view, I totally agree with
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 with, many individuals especially the youngsters largely get influenced by the actors and models that are performing on screen.
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 means that nowadays
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 can be attracted easily to
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media
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. For, instance Many international events
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 as ipl one of the renowned cricket league organised each year in India and it gets so much attention from Indian
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 that make fans crazy, due to
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 many
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 buy tickets in advance as it result sponsors earn a lot of money and make a huge profit.
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, it can be seen that the press contributed significantly to persuading a large number of
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 to follow a certain culture.
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, not only
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media
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 influence one's mind but
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 other sources like newspapers, radios, and t.v transform the opinion and character of a person. To illustrate
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, many t.v channels and radios portray the right image of a politician who is a criminal or a wicked person.
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, we can say that they convince
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 to change their attitudes and opinions by showing right sins
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 of showing their bad deeds as they are controlled by the politicians. For, example at the time of elections, there are a lot of news channels which directly or indirectly try to make campaigns in favour of
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 politicians due to which they sometimes win the elections.
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 if the
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 will show the corruption and greedy faces of
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 politicians to the
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 they will never try to take advantage of these innocent
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 ,especially the poor ones. In conclusion, I would like to say that many times
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 become partial and present only one side of the story which lead to an impact in manipulating
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's mind.
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, their job is to show truth and talk in favour of citizens and not of some bigwigs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mass media
  • influence
  • society
  • shape
  • opinions
  • character
  • public opinion
  • stereotypes
  • consumer behavior
  • materialism
  • brand awareness
  • sensationalism
  • portrayal
  • echo chamber
  • digital platforms
  • user-generated content
  • news reporting
  • advertising
  • marketing
  • cultural roles
  • gender roles
  • objectivity
  • entertainment
  • norms
  • values
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