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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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The growing usage of technology has become more global, and with time, schools and universities will no longer need teachers.
Although
this
 approach of online
study
 can be proved beneficial to some extent for the
students
, I would argue that
this
 is not necessarily the best
way
 to learn. There is no doubt that for some people, studying through the internet has globally been a medium of
study
 since the days of the COVID pandemic. The
first
 reason is that
students
 do not need to travel to the college or university to get their degree, as with just a click on their devices they can attend their classes and complete their courses.
For example
, Nowadays,
students
 generally attend their classes through the zoom meeting application to get their courses done. There may
also
 be the chance of the
students
 to complete foreign nation courses by just sitting at their home and earning a great valuable degree.
However
, there are a number of reasons that it is not necessarily the best
way
 of educating the
students
.
Firstly
 ,there is no guarantee that online
study
 is as good as the old traditional
way
, where the
students
 and teachers come face to face interaction to deliver a better
way
 of learning and teaching respectively. Not all the
students
 have evolved themselves to the culture of online
study
.
Also
, there are other excellent ways to achieve
such
 an education.
For instance
, many
students
 from Nepal, India, and China prefer their education base in developed countries like Australia, Canada and the United States, giving them an opportunity to expose themselves to gain international working experience. In conclusion, despite the potential ways in which studying online can result in a degree for the
students
, I believe that it cannot be assumed it is the best
way
 as there is an old traditional method of learning to do
this
.
Thus
, online
study
 is not the
last
 resort.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • progressively
  • substituted
  • prevalent
  • crucial
  • enhance
  • support
  • guidance
  • interaction
  • personal touch
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