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Band 6.5

Write a letter to the transport officer about a problem with transport system in your area. Explain in letter . -describe the situation you are facing -why you consider it a problem -what changes you like to recommend

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Dear Sir, I am Harry, a resident of William Street Colony, Brisbane. I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention
towards
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 a problem with
transportation
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the transportation
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 system
of
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 our area. At the onset, as our colony is 25 km far from the main city centre and about 75% of the population of our area is working, the two old
buses
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 are
alloted
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allowed
 on our area transportation route.
Hence
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, in the mornings, more than 125
people
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 travel in a bus which has
the
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 capacity of just 80 passengers.
Thus
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, the life of many
people
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 is in danger because of
non-
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the non-availablity
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availablity
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availability
 of two more
buses
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.
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, in my consideration, the worst condition of these
buses
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 can not only
genrate
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generate
 possibilities of accidents in future but
also
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 can jeopardize the health of many
people
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 due to suffocation issues.
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, I would like to
recommed
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recommend
 some changes
in
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to
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 the existing bus transportation system so that
people
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 can travel safely. Primarily, if the repair of currently
buses
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 is possible, it can decrease the chances of mishappenings.
In addition
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, there is a need
of
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for
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 two more
buses
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: one in the morning at 8 am from our colony and
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second
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the second
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 in the evening at 5:30 pm from the city centre so as to decrease the overload of passengers. I hope you will consider the genuinity of the situation and will act
accordingly
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. Look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Harry Brown

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