Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

Science

and

technology

are essential components of modern

society

that have allowed for evolution and progress.

Science

aids in the understanding of fundamental principles of the universe and

technology

aims

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to use

science

to improve life quality.Some may argue that

music

and

art

are put aside in modern

society

. In which proportions does modern

society

choose

science

and

technology

instead

of

art

and

music

? I am convinced that

science

and

technology

are omnipresent today taking the place of

music

and

art

and I will demonstrate

this

with two principal arguments.

Firstly

,

science

is often a symbol of success with

regards

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to

study

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topics at an undergraduate and graduate level. For

this

reason

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young

people

are often oriented by their parents

towards

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a scientific path albeit daunting.

For instance

, I am French and currently a student at a polytechnical school in Switzerland. Many

people

and especially adults that I talk with often congratulate me on my scientific route. During these conversations, I find that parents have a propensity to encourage their children to learn from me and try to have good grades to be accepted in prestigious scientific schools.

However

, I have never heard them promoting other types of activities

such

as

music

or

art

Therefore

,

this

is why I think that

science

is at the

center

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of attention

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a significant impact

especially

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with

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to study.

Secondly

, the after war

society

has built upon

technology

and

economical

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speculations on it.

This

is the central organ of the modern world and investments in that field are numerous. Our world aims to progress towards an ideal where life becomes easier and

this

is why

people

pay

this

much attention to

technology

. As an example, Elon musk is one of the archetype investors in

this

t domain. He continues to create new corporations related to human evolution through the use of

technology

.

Moreover

,

this

frenzy can lead to many adverse impacts on modern

society

and feed the current ideal that humanity cannot live without technical improvement.

This

finally

results in an overcaring of humans about

technology

and can

thus

play in

defavor

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favour

disfavour

to other fields

such

as

art

and

music

. In a nutshell,

science

and

technology

are primordial components of modern

society

.

Music

and arts clearly undergo the weight of

this

monopoly and that can lead to a lack of interest of

people

in these fields. If humanity continues to follow

this

path, not only the environment would suffer, but

also

many other fields can be degraded.