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some people argue that technological progress is always positive. others dispute this. What's your view and why?

#people #progress #dispute
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It is generally accepted that economic
progress
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 is
most
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the most
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 important goal.
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however
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 some people think that other types of
progress
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 are equally important for a country. On the one hand,
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the economic
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economic
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 is every nation’s bloodline.
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 means that the economic status of a country is correlated directly to its citizen’s living
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.
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,to underscore the economy as the ultimate goal for authorities to achieve is to undermine other sectors of equal importance.
firstly
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,the general health of the masses.
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secondly
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and secondly
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,education. When a country has a large number of its economic progression is almost certain.
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,others
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 that
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 mostly has a negative impact
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 on the environment. While
progress
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 can have both negative and positive effects,I would argue that
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the positive
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 effects of
progress
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 outweigh the negative.
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