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some people argue that technological progress is always positive. others dispute this. What's your view and why?

#people #progress #dispute
It is generally accepted that economic
progress
 is
most
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the most
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 important goal.
however
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 some people think that other types of
progress
 are equally important for a country. On the one hand,
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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 is every nation’s bloodline.
This
 means that the economic status of a country is correlated directly to its citizen’s living
condition
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.
On the other hand
,to underscore the economy as the ultimate goal for authorities to achieve is to undermine other sectors of equal importance.
firstly
,the general health of the masses.
secondly
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and secondly
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,education. When a country has a large number of its economic progression is almost certain.
In contrast
,others
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 that
progress
 mostly has a negative impact
in particular
 on the environment. While
progress
 can have both negative and positive effects,I would argue that
positive
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the positive
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 effects of
progress
 outweigh the negative.
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