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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and violent crimes increases. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The debate about capital
punishment
 or the
death
penalty
 is very controversial. There are different attitudes about
this
 sentence. Some people believe that the
death
penalty
 deters criminals from committing serious crimes while others are totally against it and consider it as continuing the cycle of violence. Both sides have their own logical reasons. The people who stand for capital
punishment
 claim that the most frightening thing for a human being is to lose their life;
therefore
, the
death
penalty
 is the best deterrent to discourage the public from carrying out the worst crimes. It should be mentioned that the methods of execution have become more humane over years;
therefore
, the argument that the
death
penalty
 is cruel, is not valid anymore. According to proponents of the
death
penalty
, it appeases the victim’s family and helps them to deal with their suffering.
On the other hand
, opponents claim that there’s no credible proof that the
death
penalty
 works as a deterrent. In those countries where capital
punishment
 hasn’t been abolished yet, the rate for serious criminal offences,
such
 as homicide, hasn’t changed significantly. In the antagonists’ opinion, the
death
penalty
 is a symptom of a culture of violence, not a solution to it. Retribution is just another word for revenge and you can’t expect that two wrongs can make a right. They
also
 believe that proponents ignore the pivotal fact that innocent people can be killed due to unfair sentences. In my opinion, we should try to make our society more humane.
Instead
 of using cruel methods to control criminals, it can be more effective to find the solution for all of these problems and the
death
penalty
 isn’t a suitable sentence in the 21st century. It should be replaced with a more moral method
such
 as life imprisonment and for serious offences, life imprisonment without parole can be considered a more sensible
punishment
.
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