Some people say the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say the main environmental
problem
of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and
animals
. Others say that there are more important environmental
problems
. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Nowadays environmental
problem
is one of the greatest danger not only to
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humanity
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but
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the
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all habitants of the earth. In fact, there are a lot of different opinions on
this
topic, some people say, that loss of
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particular species is the main
problem
,
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are sure that there are more important environmental
problems
. To
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On the one hand, no doubts that extinct
animals
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the
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problem
, that people must solve as soon as
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it
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possible. It should be mentioned, that most of the
problems
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appeared because of air and water pollution, urban growth
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because of a human
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activity.
On the other hand
, it is impossible to not notice, that question
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animals
is not the biggest danger to our planet.
First
of all, since the time the earth became habitual, some
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were dying due to the different issues and only the strongest, the smartest or more precisely the most adapted were able to live on. It is called natural selection. I
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the same time global warming, plastic,
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to my point of view are more important, as if these
problems
are solved, there is a possibility that
problems
with
animals
will solve themselves. Despite
this
fact, there is a
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poaching, which under no circumstances will not disappear by itself,
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if other
problems
will remain to exist, no one will survive.
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In conclusion, it is worth to be mentioned, that today our planet is suffering due to different factors, the mission of humanity is to help her, everything
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hands or sooner or later it will try to find a solution by itself.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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