You have seen an advertisement in Australian magazines for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child write a letter # Explain why you would like this # Give detail of why you are a suitable person to employ # Say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Mr Williams,

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letter is to express my interest in the advertisement you published in the Australian times on the 22nd of May where you were seeking someone to join your family to keep an eye on your six-year-old child. I would like to be considered for

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job as travelling to new places and exploring different cultures interests me, living with your family would give me an opportunity to learn more about Australia and its people. I believe I could be a good fit for

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role, as I have over 5 years of experience looking after the kids. I

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have 3 years of prior experience teaching young children before I started working as a Nanny so I can

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help your child with studies.

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to ,that I am skilled in providing basic

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-aid and cooking simple dishes. In my leisure hours, I can explore the scenic landscapes of Australia, meet new people and explore new food items. I hope you will consider me for the job and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Hanah

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

183 words

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