Some people believe that technology such as mobile phones has destroyed social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

it is important that modern technology
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innovation
play an imperative role in human' s life and cell phone has great contribution to
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social interaction.
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personally believe that excessive use of
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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has
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impact on social communication. to commence with the view of
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agreement
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significant number of people spend their quality
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time on mobile
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rather than
face
to
face
debate. to elaborate it, almost all age
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groups
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of masses engross, so much in using
mobile
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the mobile
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dial for various purposes in
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turn they are not more likely to
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.
moreover
, individuals
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themselves by using mobile phones
instead
of spending their time with loving ones.
for instance
, i headline of " the
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times" revealed that 7 out of 10 people devoted their more while to cell phones whether
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for entertainment
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or study purposes.
as a result
, spending long hours in front of
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screen
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the trend of social exchange in
this
contemporary era.
furthermore
, plenty of information is searched on mobile phones
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along
internet
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the internet
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which was got from either grandparents or parents in the ancient and
thus
this
practice
also
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face
to
face
conversation.
also
, folks keep in touch with their friends and relatives by texting messages or making or receiving phone calls
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them in spite of meeting at their homes.
for instance
, a survey conducted by
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indian
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government in 2015, found that more
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60%
people
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of people
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do not like to social
intract
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interact
contract
in these days.
hence
,
this
has been replaced by contact communication which has negative effects on social consultation. in conclusion, overspending amount of moment on the mobile not only for searching
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for material
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related to study but
also
for enjoyment has damaged social interaction.
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