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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

#company #place #hotel #feedback #participants #food #lunch
Dear Sir, I am writing to express
dissapointment
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disappointment
 of
parcticipants
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participants
 with
you
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your
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food
.
It and
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And
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 my team would
be say
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say
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 that
the
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apply
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your hotel is too neat and clean.
In your
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Your
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 hotel has
large
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a large
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 whole with one hundred sitting chairs at one time. Which could be loved by participants. They
also
 liked the location of your hotel.
Moreover
, your reception area is
too
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very
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 friendly.
However
, they are not happy with your
food
 which served in lunch because the waiting time is long.
Furthermore
, what
food
 they
willing
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are willing
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 to eat sometimes
it
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apply
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is not available
in
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on
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 your menu. I
wolud
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would
 like to suggest you that hire more
chef
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chefs
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 and staff so they
would
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will
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cook on time and serve the
meal
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meals
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.
In addition
, add different types of
cousines
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cuisines
in
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to
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 your menu
for instance
italian
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Italian
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food
.
This
 could probably daunting the heart of participants. I am hoping that the
food
 quality will improve in future. Wishing you a great day. Yours faithfully, Sarb
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