A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extend do you agree/ disagree with this option?

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In the present era,
while
determining an individual's worth, numerous traditional values
such
as charity, kindness, or trust seem less important than wealth and social standing. I agree that luxurious possessions and high status in
society
are the basis for valuing a
person
. People think a
person
with high-valued assets can live comfortably and possess power in
society
to be considered worthy. Nowadays, people prioritize their interests over kindness to celebrate luxury materials.
For instance
,
according to
Forbes Magazine, Kylie Jenner, one of the young billion entrepreneurs, has luxury cars, and jewellery
however
still total donations account for less than 1% of her total earnings to charity each year. She spends on buying expensive cars and bungalows, setting a bar for others to be financially comfortable.
Therefore
, ownership of high-priced virtue rather than kind societal work is considered of high significance in judging a character.
Moreover
, relations are often based on the status an individual is carrying in
society
.
For instance
, surveys show that in India families prefer to marry their sons and daughters to wealthy bureaucrats with fraud or criminal cases rather than an ordinary individual with average income and highly honoured in
society
. These things show how
society
makes ethics and moral principles less important in life.
Thus
, an unethical
person
tends to be more worthy than an individual possessing moral values. To summarize, everyone believes that moral standards are no longer used as the basis to judge an individual.
Instead
of owning costly articles
along with
the designation of high societal value evaluates a
person
as having high net worth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • traditional values
  • luxurious lifestyles
  • high social standing
  • prioritize
  • trustworthiness
  • values are upheld
  • charity
  • community involvement
  • tight-knit communities
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