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nowadays ,people in most countries decide to have children later in life. why do the do so? do the advantages of this trend outweight the disadvantages?

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I believe that the new generations do have not that's much time to give to babies whereas they decide to make the future better than they plan to be a parent. In coming passage shows the advantages outweigh the disadvantages are given below. As we see apply, the coming generation wanted the freedom to compare to the load in their head. To explain that, they wanted to explore the world and generate heaves amount of money for fulfilling their need and requirements without any minor responsibility.
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 when they have a late plan to babies where they got much to know each other and making understating with feeling and loving moment which gives a good memory.
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, when we saw famous people, they decided on
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 future
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 he/she try to become guardians of any youngster and merits for those children coming into their family or becoming the family member.
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, demerits have
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 come with some time. In overage, they are not able to help their youth age where the child became young than they wanted help from their parent where some parent passes away during their children teens and young people goes wrong part and becomes roud or
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, they become behave less how they do not know how to respect old and young people while during the childhood they
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 come as bad era with family. In conclusion, it mostly seems to me that we gain more than we lose from in
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 era of modernization agreeing to have a baby late in life.
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