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Some people like to try new things, for example, places and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion

It is often considered that adventurers people experience a different type of joy but others who live in a small bubble may not want to go for it.
This
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 essay will discuss both these attitudes and argue in favour of the letter. On the one hand, people who enjoy trying new things are the ones who experience the excitement of life.
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, I believe a human should travel to new places and meet new lifestyles and different cultures, not only he or she will improve communication skills but
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 will open new opportunities.
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, opportunities often occur throughout discovering new places and trying to do multiple activities.
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, planning a trip to a foreign country may lead someone to find his or her true self and passion in life.
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, most people with the fear of trying new adventures are scared of getting hurt or injured.
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, risky things may often seem a threat to them.
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, those individuals live in a boring stable rhythm of living and do not feel different and new motions.
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 to that, those who live in their comfort zone are probably not developing in any aspect. In my opinion, I believe a human being should at least experience new stuff
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 as travelling, eating other culture's food and meeting new communities.
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, some individuals enjoy their comfortable space and to me, that
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 should be respected.
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,
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 there are humans who prefer only doing familiar activities, it is important to advise them to see the world from a different perspective and approach the happiness of experiencing life

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task achievement
The introduction should clearly outline the main points you are going to discuss. Try to be specific about both attitudes you will explore.
coherence cohesion
In paragraphs, ensure each one focuses on a single point. This makes it easier for the reader to follow your thoughts.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words or phrases between sentences and paragraphs. Words like 'firstly', 'in addition', and 'on the other hand' improve flow.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion in your essay, which helps the reader understand your perspective.
task achievement
Your examples, like traveling to new places, show good understanding and support your points well.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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