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Some people think that school should choose students according to their academic abilities, while others think it is better to have students of different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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A group of the population believe that the education system should choose their own pupils by considering their abilities and talents in academic fields,
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 others consider it is more beneficial to have a variety of
students
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 together in the classrooms. I believe it is not appropriate to categorize
students
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 and
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 all the
students
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 have to have equal chances of studying.
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 with, some of the
students
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 are more talented in some majors compared to their classmates ,
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 as math and physics. They can have better grades and mostly have better
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grades overall
 grades,
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human abilities will not be limited to just educational fields and for normal life pupils have to be able to go through all situations. Putting extra limitations will affect talented
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students
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 behaviour and they will not be able to adapt themselves
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 their future lives.
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, if we have a class
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 full of skilled student and they are just focusing on their lessons, after graduation, they will enter a world
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 completely different from their previous one and they will not be able to overcome it.
On the other hand
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, some argue that it is essential to preserve the differences between
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 and I agree
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 because it will provide a real-world experience for the young generation because in real life the community is not separated and
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 it will encourage other
students
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 to try harder to achieve better grades.
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, both of those communities will experience several benefits.
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, some studies have shown that the most effective method of learning is to teach others,
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, the skilled ones are able to educate and enhance their abilities. In conclusion, In my opinion, making limitations for scholars is not a beneficial method because the younger generation will not be able to cope with the real world ,
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, it is more positive to have
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diversity
 in classrooms because it will help them to socialize and
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 improve their knowledge.

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Vocabulary
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Grammar
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Task response
Your essay effectively discusses both views and clearly states your own opinion, aligning well with the task requirements.
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Coherence and Cohesion
The logical flow and organization of your essay are commendable, facilitating easy understanding for the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic abilities
  • competitive environment
  • homogeneous grouping
  • tailored teaching
  • accelerating learning
  • resource allocation
  • social inclusion
  • stigmatization
  • educational diversity
  • real-world scenarios
  • collaborate
  • varied skills
  • cooperative learning
  • peer teaching
  • inclusive practices
  • learning needs
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