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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport

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There is no doubt, that
people
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 have been engaging in a vast activity and mobile rather than previous a few decades. Some individuals believe that building extra railways are more beneficial, others state that it is better to construct new many roads for travelling in the nation. In my opinion,
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, I think that
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 modes of
transport
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 offer benefits in different ways and they need to improve
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 and
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 essay explores how can help
people
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 with
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 systems. On the one hand, nowadays available speedy and comfortable trains and
people
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 prefer them to move from place to place as a long journey with a larger number of relatives or groups of friends as a leisure
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.
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 is because it fulfils more than a hundred passengers and much more goods carry at a
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 and expects more freedom to enjoy.
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, the express ’ Yaldeevi’ train from Colombo to Nuwara Eliya takes only about three hours,
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 travellers enjoy a greenish atmosphere together, looking at pictures of landscapes and waterfalls of Sri
Lanka’s
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 beauty up to down.
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,
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 concerning train travelling,
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, adults have the probability to manage their expenses, because
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 transportation system offers a lower budget and they have special offers connection with star hotels with cheaper rates which do not have in public buses.
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, If a single adult requires money for twenty Kilometers on the train around half from a means of public
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. Another possible crucial point
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 those who choose trains for a preferred mode occur rarely accidents, at the same
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, save their valuable timing and it can be seen minimal interference and appear no traffic jams as well as, no
time
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 wasting middle of the way due to accurate schedules,
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, if buildup many new railways tend to enhance easy accesses for
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 civilians and noncitizens.
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, the latter view plays an essential role in the community due to it has interconnecting networks for different parts between the cities and villages for short to long-distance and it catches easily and does not require early bookings. As an example, if anyone missed any particular bus who daily use he surely gets the
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 one the same way after a few minutes.
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, as a whole, the country gets richer and richer and the authority earns more income from taxes
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 introducing
people
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 to public
transport
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 modules because of more ticket charges. As an example, In the UK's newspapers had seen the
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 income to the nation by giving public mode of
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 in 2020.
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 why the community need to grow widely in that project of transportation. In conclusion,
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, the public has more advantages from expanding new modern railways for mobility with minimal costs,
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 need to consider through public transports into account as it connects many ways for
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’s transportation,
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, the government should be divided the money into fifty percentage for each mode as
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 have incredible effects on a country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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