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Essay #1: Technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, our
technology
 has reached the highest peak that could not be imagined.
However
, cutting edge
technology
 does have both sides of pros and cons. Case of the
technology
 for
children
that
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impacted hugely, and it changed completely their free
time
 compared with our childhood. I opine that
this
 change is a detrimental flow of the new era.
Firstly
, one of the following problems of the change is that juvenile
children
 spending their most of
time
 to watch youtube or play games with their smartphones than making friends and spending
time
 with them. That interrupts socializing with others and it causes various problems
such
 as adaptation to people in school and sympathetic ability with similar ages of people.
Hence
, we need some drastic measures to minimize collateral damage from the inevitable enhancement of
technology
.
For instance
, develop an application that can restrict using
time
 on a daily basis.
Then
 it can encourage the
children
 to realize there are many more interesting activities
out
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 of their room to have fun. To conclude, the absence of the capability of socializing is a huge disadvantage that can not be overcome.
Therefore
, even if restricting
children
 forcefully by application is not the softest way, we need to let them try a variety of experiences.
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