In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Consuming junk

food

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has been popular these days. In some nations, many folks are experiencing life-

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threatening

diseases due to consuming convenient

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.

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, it is essential for the

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to increase the

tax

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of

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kind of meal. In my perspective, I disagree with

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argument as it will give

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effect

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the small business and

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habit will not be

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.

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essay will elucidate the detailed opinions. On the one hand, generating

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regulation might cause an instant effect as people might immediately stop eating

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menu.

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, if the authority offers some additional consequences for those who still consume a high amount of

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food

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,

society

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will certainly never consume it again.

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, recently, the

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has increased the price of petrol that

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people convert their cooking method from petrol to gas. It is because

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society

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could not afford to buy it and try to find

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alternative way in solving

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problem.

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,

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practice might present several impacts.

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, It could offer detrimental effects

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the small businesses as they have

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the price of their products which

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the

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of their customers.

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, they might have to close their businesses and try another occupation, unlike they become

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burden for the countries.

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, recently, in Indonesia, the

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has increased the

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of

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palm oil which encourage

society

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to use

another resource

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for cooking

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as air frying.

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, the palm oil resellers gain some

loses

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trend.

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,

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new habit of

less-consuming

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less consuming

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cuisine will not stay

longer

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as they do not have

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reason why they have to stop eating that comfort menu.

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, when the

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take down

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tax

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system,

society

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will start eating

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convenient

food

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over and over. To conclude,

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tax

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the tax

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system

excel

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to change people’s behaviour instantly.

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, I have an opposite opinion as it might generate a new problem for the authority due to a high

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unemployment.

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, people might have a wrong perspective of why they have to stop buying

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meal.

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, the

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should provide alternative jobs for small businesses

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will be impacted by the regulation and

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educate

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society

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about

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issue by giving them a massive campaign.