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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is difficult to
survise
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survive
service
 with limited
income
 due to
increasing
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 inflation rate and living
cost
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costs
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. Many people prefer to have various sources of
income
 for livelihood and they keep on enhancing
the
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their
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 skills
by
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through
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 periodic training courses.
This
 essay will discuss the importance of parallel
income
 sources and simultaneous skill improvement. In recent time, youngsters
prefre
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prefer
 to have
severel
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several
employement
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employment
parallely
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parallelly
parallel
. The dependency on
particular
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 career may not be enough to
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accommodate
 various monetary requirements.
For example
, people work for
diffrenet
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different
 companies
during
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on
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weekdays
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week days
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weekdays
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 and off days.
The
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diffrent
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different
 set of skills may require for establishing
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different
diffrent
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a diffrent
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sourse
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source
 of
income
. The knowledge requirement in
diffrent
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different
 industries defers from others. For
eample
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example
,
skills
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the skills
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 for working in
call
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a call
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sentre
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centre
 and working in
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 industry
is
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are
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 entirely
diffrent
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different
.
Hence
, continuous knowledge enhancement is unavoidable to meet the employment
criterias
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criteria
. The trend of several careers or sources of
income
 is not a choice but
demand
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the demand
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 of
this
 time. With increasing living
cost
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costs
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, limited
income
 could not provide
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apply
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acceptable living standards.
The more
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 money from
various
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a various
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career
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careers
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 would
accomodate
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accommodate
 all the expenses and provide
finacial
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financial
independency
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independence
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. To live
healthy
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a healthy
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 and stress-free life, one has to
acommodate
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accommodate
 all expenses by any means. The increasing trend of various careers is quite a normal across the
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globe
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glob
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globe
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 to match with
fastmoving
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the fastmoving
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 world and to live a modern
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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. In conclusion,
the
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education and knowledge enhancement is a continuous process to live a
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balanced
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balance
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balanced
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 life and manage
income
.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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