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"Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.

#prevention #cure” #diseases #measures
In recent years, many medical experts began to question the necessity to invest millions of dollars
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 related to people's bad habits
such
 as alcohol abuse and smoking. Some believe preventative
measures
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 argue that medical treatment is the only practical solution. Personally, I believe preventative
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 others for the following reasons. Admittedly, developing medicines can certainly reduce
sufferings
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 and expand the lifespan of patients.
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, preventative
measures
 are more cost-effective and efficient. Preventative
measures
 can reduce expenses of purchasing and maintaining medical facilities given
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 focus on helping patients change their
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lifestyles
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life styles
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instead
 of treating them physically. In comparison with the expensive medical examination, health advice and suggestion the Healthy lifestyles and diets can help patients recover more naturally with no
ther
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other
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 side-effects. Since many health issues are the result of poor hygiene practices and habits, raising people's awareness is necessary to step in
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. Aside from that, illness prevention
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more sustainable
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. Many people
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive care
  • prevalence
  • healthcare budgets
  • public health campaigns
  • healthy lifestyles
  • long-term benefits
  • early detection
  • intervention
  • severe stages
  • accessibility
  • public compliance
  • unpredictability
  • ethical considerations
  • resource allocation
  • lifestyle diseases
  • mitigate
  • global disparities
  • high-income countries
  • low-income countries
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