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Discuss the advantages and the disdavantages of study abroad

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Studying overseas is a dream for many adolescents. When they decide whether to complete their
study
 in a foreign country or not, they consider many factors
such
 as
study
 fees, living costs, and personal development.
This
 essay will
further
 elaborate on the merits and demerits of
this
 issue in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are a number of benefits of learning abroad. The most significant is that being an international student is a great chance to practice
a foreign languages
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 and enjoy different cultures.
For instance
, Australia is a multicultural country, their international
students
 come from more than a hundred countries so you can have numerous
chance
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 to understand the culture of other places.
Moreover
, the experience of studying abroad is an advantage for my future career. During the journey, you can have widened your worldview and build up your own values, all of these are precious for your future.
On the contrary
,
students
 may undergo some troubles in
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unfamiliar nation. There is no denying the fact that you need to pay a considerable amount for your
study
 fee and living cost. To cite an example, the
study
 fee
of
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 international
students
 at the University of Auckland is fivefold of domestic
students
.
Besides
 the
study
 fee,
students
 need to pay medical insurance for each year as well.
Furthermore
, discrimination is common in a university. Undoubtedly, some local citizens are not friendly to a foreigner. In a nutshell, to recapitulate the aforementioned benefits and drawbacks. Needless to say,
Students
 can obtain priceless experiences when they
study
 aboard,
however
, they may face many unexpected difficulties in their long journey.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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