Nowadays parents are forcing their word to do part time jobs in their free time. Write advantage and disadvantages of this phenomenon

It becomes very popular, that
children
are motivated by their parents to start
earn
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their own money in case they have
a
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spare
time
.
This
trend definitely has a number of pros.
First
of all,
children
start to feel
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for every dollar they spend, as they have a clear understanding of how much
efforts
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they should make, in order to earn it. The
next
plus of participation
to
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a part-
time
job is a development of
a
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time
management skills, as
children
begin to decide and start setting priorities among working, studying and relaxing
time
frames. The
last
obvious positive point, which I see, is that teenagers have to communicate with diverse
collegues
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colleagues
,
age
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and interests wise, which will develop their communication skills and overall emotional intelligence.
However
,
beginning
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of
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working in high school or even university ages can lead to a number of problems in
children
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lives.
Part-
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time
job offers access to a particular amount of money, which is enough to cover some basic needs in entertaining and sparing
time
with friends in a more exciting way, which can redirect the focus from studying to working. The
second
problem I predict that
children
could face is decreasing
of
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studying productivity due to increased physical stress on
young
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organism
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. The final disadvantage of starting working while studying is
possibility
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the possibility
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to stop studying and begin
full-
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a full-time
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time
career without appropriate education. To conclude everything which is written above, I would state that it mostly depends on a character of a person and his maturity level, as starting to attend
part-
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time
job requires responsibility and a clear understanding of your future plans.
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