Some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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infrastructure, many

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claim that it is essential for cities to invest substantially in the creation of large and beautiful public

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will promote tourism and public health. In

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tourism, the demand for beautiful outdoor public

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doubling. They are important for more than just aesthetic reasons. It provides a communal area for

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to connect with nature and other

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, it allows youngsters to participate in a variety of outdoor activities,

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from various areas to come and spend leisure time and improve their general health.

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help to boost tourism. It attracts visitors from all over the world to view and enjoy the area's natural beauty.New York city's Central

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is a classic example. The city Was well known for business visits prior to its development. The construction of

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visitors from all over the world.

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think that spending too much money on

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important. A multitude of applicable functions might be a priority for construction purposes.

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, if improved transportation infrastructure is built, residents will need less time to commute,

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they will have more time to spare.

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could result in an overall improvement in the quality of life.

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, functional towns are more attractive options for

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and companies to run

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and boost the economy which later can help create beautiful cities. In conclusion, there

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on both sides of

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