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Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem.

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In a contemporary world, through social
media
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we can get information and news all over the world. But, it is obvious that there are both positive and negative impacts on social
life
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. In the following essay, I will examine the causes and the negative consequences as well. On the one hand, the main benefit of using social
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 is that we can connect with each other around the world. To elaborate
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, in the past
people
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 who are living in foreign countries, were difficulty reaching each other, but nowadays, due to the advent of technology,
people
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 can communicate with their families and friends through social
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 platforms.
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, social
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 applications like Facebook and Instagram offer private groups where we can make new friends and share our common interests.
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, there has a negative effect on our daily
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People
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 spend a lot of their time using
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, which can lead to mental and physical health problems. Especially among young children, who are spending most of their time playing video games.
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 of playing a game, they should read a book or learn new things that they are interested in.
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,
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 feel depressed using social
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.
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,
people
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 share their good things on social
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 as good-looking body structure and successful careers make other
people
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 in the depression of their
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, they are irritated and compare with other
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's
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. To conclude, it is inevitable that families and friends who are living in other countries
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 are closer through social
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. Needless to say,we cannot ignore the shortcomings. It can make our
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 to be easier but
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 more complicated than in the past.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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