Some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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days,
cities
should be well in all aspects whether it is on services or attractive structure.
However
, some
people
believe that
cities
should be well designed in
the
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eye-catching way and others feel that function plays
important
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role. In my opinion, functionality is a much more important factor and
further
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I will discuss both views with relevant examples. To initiate with, there is
plethora
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reason
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of functionality creates better livelihood of
cities
people
.
Firstly
, amenities
such
as transportation, drainage, amusement, teaching, healthcare etc give quality life for
cities
public. To explain it, a
city
which
have
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all basic utility can
made
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make
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easy
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everyday life of residents.
However
,
people
do not have to go outside to find facilities.
moreover
, amusement facilities
such
as
garden
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gardens
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can
relief
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their stress.
People
can have fun by making activities that made their stress reduce.
Secondly
, more
people
are attract
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in
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cities
for purpose of
educational
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, business etc. To elaborate it,
good
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amount of facilities are draw rural area
people
for work purpose,
,
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however
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this
will boost
economy
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the economy
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of
town
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the town
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.
In addition
, business growth of
cities
will increase,
overseas
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and overseas
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people
take
keen
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a keen
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interest in
business
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. On the opposite side, having a beautifully designed
city
attract
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attracts
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tourists. To explain it, other cites
people
are attrect to explore
city
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the city
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and that create
impact
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an impact
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on tourism.
However
, the earring of tourist industry will boost and
this
is good for their
city
.
For instance
, the old forts
which
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located in the Jaipur
is
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very astonishing.
Foreign
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countries
people
are
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oftenly
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often
visit
this
place to explore culture and tradition.
Consequently
, the local
people
of
this
place can earn money threw the tourist.
Furthermore
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reason is
,
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increasing population of
town
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the town
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.
However
, most
the
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people
have to live in a
well maintained
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well-maintained
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society and they prefer to live in
well designed
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cities
.
Hence
, beautiful
cities
draw
people
to live in their town and it male surge
up
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apply
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in
population
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the population
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. To recapitulate, both the aspects of attracting
cities
and functionality
is
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considered before
toplanning
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planning
to planning
develop
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city
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the city
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.
However
, on my
side
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second
option
outweigh
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the
first
one.
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