Some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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days,
cities
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should be well in all aspects whether it is on services or attractive structure.
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, some
people
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believe that
cities
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should be well designed in
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eye-catching way and others feel that function plays
important
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role. In my opinion, functionality is a much more important factor and
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further
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I will discuss both views with relevant examples. To initiate with, there is
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reason
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of functionality creates better livelihood of
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people
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.
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, amenities
such
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as transportation, drainage, amusement, teaching, healthcare etc give quality life for
cities
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public. To explain it, a
city
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which
have
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all basic utility can
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easy
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the easy
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everyday life of residents.
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,
people
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do not have to go outside to find facilities.
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, amusement facilities
such
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as
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can
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their stress.
People
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can have fun by making activities that made their stress reduce.
Secondly
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, more
people
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are attract
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in
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cities
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for purpose of
educational
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, business etc. To elaborate it,
good
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amount of facilities are draw rural area
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for work purpose,
,
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however
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this
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will boost
economy
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the economy
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of
town
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the town
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.
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, business growth of
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will increase,
overseas
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and overseas
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people
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take
keen
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interest in
business
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the business
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. On the opposite side, having a beautifully designed
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attract
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attracts
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tourists. To explain it, other cites
people
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are attrect to explore
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city
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the city
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and that create
impact
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an impact
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on tourism.
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, the earring of tourist industry will boost and
this
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is good for their
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, the old forts
which
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located in the Jaipur
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very astonishing.
Foreign
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countries
people
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are
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oftenly
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often
visit
this
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place to explore culture and tradition.
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, the local
people
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of
this
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place can earn money threw the tourist.
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Furthermore
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reason is
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increasing population of
town
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the town
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.
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, most
the
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people
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have to live in a
well maintained
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well-maintained
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society and they prefer to live in
well designed
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cities
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.
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, beautiful
cities
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draw
people
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to live in their town and it male surge
up
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in
population
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the population
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. To recapitulate, both the aspects of attracting
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and functionality
is
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are
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considered before
toplanning
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planning
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develop
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to develop
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city
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the city
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.
However
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, on my
side
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second
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option
outweigh
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the
first
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one.
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