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The growth of multinational companies and the resulting rise of globalization creates positive effect for all. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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There have been debates regarding the
developing
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development
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 of worldwide enterprise and the leading increase of globalism produces benefits for everyone. I personally disagree with
this
 viewpoint, the reasons to support my opinion will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, it might seem reasonable for some people to argue that the advancement of multinational companies provides advantages for all
countries
 as a multinational corporation helps the technological growth of the
country
 as well. They bring new innovations and technological advancements to the host
country
.
In addition
, They help modernize the industry in developing
countries
.
For instance
, the phenomenon by which millions of people have interconnected thanks to the power of the digital world via platforms
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, Skype or Youtube.
However
,
this
 is probably because they believe that
globalization
 increases direct foreign investment in the
country
,
this
 slowly gives rise to the establishment monopoly of foreign institutions in the
country
.
Moreover
, the mechanization of industries increases the chances of unemployment in developing
countries
. At the same time, global economic growth and industrial productivities are both the driving force and the major consequences of
globalization
. They
also
 have big environmental consequences as they contribute to the depletion of natural resources, deforestation and the destruction of ecosystems and
loss
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 of biodiversity. The worldwide distribution of goods is
also
 creating a big garbage problem, especially on what concerns plastic pollution. Despite its benefits, the economic growth driven by
globalization
 has not been done without awakening criticism. The consequences of
globalization
 are far from homogeneous: income inequalities, disproportional wealth and trades that benefit parties differently. In the end, one of the criticisms is that some actors (
countries
, companies, individuals) benefit more from the phenomena of
globalization
, while others are sometimes perceived as the “losers” of
globalization
. As a matter of fact, a recent report from Oxfam says that 82% of the world’s generated wealth goes to 1% of the population.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Multinational companies
  • Globalization
  • Economic expansion
  • Innovation
  • Competitive prices
  • Cultural understanding
  • Technological dispersion
  • Product variety
  • Exploitation
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Sustainability
  • Labor market
  • Traditional industries
  • Interconnectedness
  • Systemic vulnerabilities
  • Prosperity
  • Job creation
  • Quality of life
  • Environmental impact
  • Corporate responsibility
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