IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The system used for rubbish/garbage area collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter: Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours Suggest what should be done about the problem

Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
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 letter to report on the faulty rubbish collection system in my
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. The garbage bins are not being emptied properly, as there is a lot of
waste
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leftover
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left over
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.
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 causes the
waste
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 to pile up very quickly, slowing down the entire rubbish disposal process.
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 has been a very uncomfortable experience to deal with, as the residual
waste
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 has been causing a terrible stench in the area.
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 has attracted a lot of harmful insects and flies around the
waste
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 bins. These insects often carry harmful diseases that can significantly deteriorate our health. I would strongly advise you to look into
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 issue and improve the
waste
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 collection machines to ensure that the garbage bins are completely cleared out regularly.
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, I would suggest conducting routine maintenance of these machines to ensure their smooth operation. I hope you will take my advice into consideration. I look forward to your response. Yours sincerely, Adel

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task achievement
Try to give more details about the problem to make your letter stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each idea in your paragraphs flows smoothly together.
coherence and cohesion
In the letter, remember to clearly state your address before the greeting or in the closing.
positive
You have used a polite tone throughout the letter.
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Your suggestions for improvement are clear and reasonable.
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