In modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work, and accommodate via the Internet without face-to-face contact with one another. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development.

In modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work, and accommodate via the Internet without face-to-face contact with one another. I believe that living without face-to-face
communication
has brought a significant number of drawbacks, but I would partly agree with
this
statement. On the one hand, People will more comfortable and convenient.
For example
, People maybe not
going
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out
from
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their homes
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homes
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home
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to buy a product or
communication
with friends or peers because everything can do inside the house via
internet
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the internet
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.
Moreover
, People can contact
with
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relatives in remote areas easily because they can use video
call
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for free in
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the application
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application
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. It
cheaper
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than
contack
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contact
with phone signal in the past that very expensive.
On the other hand
, Real-life
relationship
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relationships
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and
communication
are still important.
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, Due to I must
learning
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online because of
covid-19
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a covid-19
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pandemic. I feel that I miss university vibes, friends and lecturers.
In addition
, I feel sorrow that I never
have
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an opportunity to learn with
well-known
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a well-known
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professor
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professors
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in
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face-to-face
because
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lockdown policy.
Moreover
, I think everybody
wish
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to see friends, superstars, politicians and other celebrities not only on TV or computer but
aiso
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also
on
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face-to-face. To sum up, the benefits it brings do not justify the fact that it is damaged badly on our interactive
communication
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online shopping
  • remote work
  • virtual meetings
  • contactless transactions
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • efficiency
  • time-saving
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • social interaction
  • fraud
  • misuse
  • dependency
  • technology
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