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Some today argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from internet and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schools #children #internet #home
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A highly controversial issue relates to
children
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 from the internet at home
instead
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 of sitting down in a classroom. It is no
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 the fact that
school
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 is not a place just for enhancing knowledge.
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, I firmly
disagee
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disagree
 with the given notion.
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 elaborate on my visions in the forthcoming paragraphs. To be with, there are a number of arguments in favour of my stance. The most significant thing is not only literacy and numeracy are being learned in a
school
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, but
also
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 personal development like communication
skill
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 and
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 up their own worldview.
For instance
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,
children
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 who
study
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 alone at home do not have chances to meet their classmates.
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 the other words, they lose the opportunities to make new friends and join the tiny community. Needless to say,
this
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 will affect
children
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 to
develope
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develop
 their values, morality and
problem solving
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 skill. Obviously,
school
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 is a place that
supporting
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students
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 to grow up.
In addition
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 to
this
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, another pivotal factor to support my proposition is that teachers are not easy to track
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study
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the study
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 progress
for
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of
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 each student in online
lessons
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. Even
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though
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thought
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though
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 teachers can deliver their
lessons
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 to
students
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 directly
by
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through
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 some online applications like Zoom and Google Classroom, they are hard to observe
students
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whom
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who
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 can follow the
lessons
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 or not. To cite an example,
students
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 can ask questions after
lessons
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 when they
study
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 in
school
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.
However
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, a global report in
educational
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 sector indicated that more than 70% of teachers state that
children
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 are hard to express their difficulties on the internet since it is
embarass
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embarrassed
embarrass
 to show their questions in front of the class. In a nutshell, to recapitulate the aforementioned arguments, I would like to restate my
prosition
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position
 of face-to-face
lessons
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 in schools are too important to be ignored, with concerning
students
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' development and
tacing
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taking
tracing
 their
study
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 progress.
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