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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly, fossil
fuels
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 play a crucial role in modern society.
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 some people regard searching for safe alternatives as the top priority, I am strongly opposed to
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 argument, and the reasons will be thoroughly elaborated on as follows. Since scientific breakthroughs are usually unpredictable, finding another energy source seems not economical.
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, even if governments or businesses keep investing in relevant fields, the results are still unknown or might be in vain eventually.
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 the Taiwanese government has allocated over 10 billion dollars to the development of solar power during the past decades, neither advancement nor improvement is shown
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 a study conducted by the Department of Economics in Taiwan.
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, the majority of the Taiwanese still highly rely on the use of fossil
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 despite the fact that they cause pollution to our environment. Another major concern is that people have been accustomed to the use of fossil
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 since industrialization, and replacing
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 a widely accepted habit can be challenging. After all, products composed of fossil
fuels
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 exist in our daily lives everywhere, and I doubt that individuals are able to live without them. To name just a few, plastic bags and some shirts all contain a certain percentage of crude oil, both of which are prevalent in our surroundings.
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, employers at gasoline or other related factories will be forced to change their careers, which can lead to heated disputes or even social disorder. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned, finding safe alternatives is not the first priority nowadays
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 the limited budgets and people’s long-existing habits.

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Clarify your position in the introduction to ensure it directly responds to the prompt.
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Each paragraph should begin with a strong topic sentence that clearly states the main idea.
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Ensure all points are fully developed with clear examples and explanations to strengthen arguments.
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Work on transitioning between ideas more smoothly for better flow across paragraphs.
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Good use of specific examples, such as the Taiwanese government’s investment in solar power.
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, summarizing the main points effectively.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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