Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?
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enormously
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on
people
as well as society
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the local
community
. However
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a person
person
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people
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a damaging
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impacts
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society
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impact
they had from social media utilization has clear advantages. Firstly
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the undeveloped
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the bond
people
all over the world and only communicate with their closest circle or community
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their
interest
.
On the other hand
, the impact
felt by society
from this
site can only be seen as negative. Adolescents incline to spend more time with people
via
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local
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the local
community
. Consequently
, the people
within local
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the local
community
are no longer forming supportive relationships. Furthermore
, society
as a whole is becoming more fragmented as people
spend much more time accessing social media with people
they never met instead
of meeting people
closer with
them.
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although
social networking sites benefit Add an article
the individual
an individual
individual
to reach their friends and relatives, they have not had the same Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
impact
to
the wider Change preposition
on
society
or local community
. They need to struggle more to involve local people
joining
local activities in order to promote the future of Change preposition
in joining
community
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