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Some people spend most of their lives close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words

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Living in an area close to where you are born is preferred by some
people
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. There are certain
pros
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 and
cons
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 associated with living in an area where you were born for your entire
life
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. But is it worth living in just
one
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 area for the rest of your
life
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?
This
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 essay will discuss various advantages and disadvantages associated with that.
To begin
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 with, it is great spending most of
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life
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your life
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 in your
hometown
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 and being surrounded by
people
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 and things whom
we
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you
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 have known since childhood.
This
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 creates a special bond between us and the
people
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 and things around us. Not getting out of
one
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's comfort zone could be
one
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 of the reasons behind
people
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 not leaving their
hometown
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. Some
people
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 are not good at adapting to changes in their
life
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 and because of that, they might find themselves in a very vulnerable and difficult situation when they move out of their
hometown
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.
This
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 has been observed in some of the
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college-going
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college
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colleges
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 going population, where students tend to attend colleges which are closer to their
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hometown
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hometowns
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.
Hence
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, there is a certain amount of
population
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the population
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 that prefers being closer to home.
Additionally
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, there are certain
pros
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 and
cons
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 associated with staying in your own
hometown
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.
People
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 who stay closer to their hometowns sometimes turn out to be great local entrepreneurs. Since
,
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apply
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people
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 who stay in
one
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place
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 all their
life
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 are much more aware
about
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of
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 the needs of the
people
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 around them. Which eventually helps them in catering to the needs of the
people
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 and look out for solutions. These solutions sometimes guide them in setting up their own local businesses which eventually helps in creating jobs and boosting the economy.
Conversely
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, there are some disadvantages associated with being
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in
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one
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place
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 all your
life
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 as well.
Although
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,
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apply
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 being in
one
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place
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 helps us in becoming much more aware
about
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of
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 our
hometown
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 and
needs
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the needs
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 of the
people
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, it
also
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 makes us a bit narrow-minded and less accepting of different cultures or backgrounds.
One
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 can
also
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 have less worldly knowledge if he or she chooses to stay in just
one
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place
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 all their
life
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. To summarize, it is a choice that
people
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 make or are forced to make due to circumstances in
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one's
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their
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life
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,
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 if they want to move out or stay in
one
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place
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 all their
life
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. Both the options have
pros
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 and
cons
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,
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however
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,however
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 it is up to a person, how he or she weighs these
pros
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 and
cons
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 and
decide
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decides
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 what is best for their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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