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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that unhealthy eating leads to a negative impact on individuals and society as a whole. Some
people
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 suggest that the government should
tax
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 unhealthy
foods
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. While others believe that it's unfair and unnecessary to impose fat taxes. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss these views and give some reasons why unhealthy
foods
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 should be taxed. On the one hand, there are several reasons why
people
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 think that imposing a fat
tax
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 is the necessary thing that government should do to protect
people
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's health.
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, imposing a fat
tax
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 can help
people
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 avoid a lot of diseases
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 as blood pressure or stomachache.
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, if unhealthy
food
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 is taxed, there will be fewer
people
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 buying these unhealthy
foods
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 and they only buy healthy
foods
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.
This
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 will encourage
people
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 to eat more healthy
foods
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.
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,
people
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 will decide to buy fresh potatoes
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 of french fries if they are overpriced.
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 imposing a fat
tax
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 is the best way to limit eating unhealthy
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.
On the other hand
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, I believe that imposing a "fat
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" is unfair and unnecessary.
To begin
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 with, imposing a fat
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 can make
people
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 have a difficult decision to eat because some
people
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 think that unhealthy
food
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 is the only affordable meal and the healthy meal have to spend a lot of money for them.
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, if imposing the fat
tax
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, some
people
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 will not eat their favourite
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such
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 as soft drinks or sweets.
This
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 will make them feel uncomfortable and unfulfilled with their
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 needs.
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, children tend to eat unhealthy
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such
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 as sweets, if taxing
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 unhealthy
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, their
food
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 requests will not be met. Overall, these are the reasons why taxing unhealthy
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 is not necessary for some
people
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. In conclusion,
although
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 taxing unhealthy
food
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 will protect
people
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's health, it seems to me that imposing a fat
tax
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 is unfair and unnecessary for some
people
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