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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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We can confidently say the transport system is crucial for any
city
 and its habitats. Communication and for commercial issues, we have to connected cities near us, that's why some
people
 feel it is important to spend a huge amount of money on building new railway lines for fast train between cities.
On the other hand
, those
people
 who regularly use public
transportation
, believe the money should be spent to develop existing
transportation
systems
. For the benefit of globalization, we can use every part of the world for significant demand. For trade, jobs, communication and migration
people
 gather in the urban area. So that more and more
people
 every day come and go to another
city
.
Although
 few
people
 don't go to another
city
 regularly unless they have any valid reason. But, most of the
people
 do jobs and do business in another
city
. They need a fast track for
transportation
. Particularly, for these types of
people
 who always enter another
city
 and gone,
obviously
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 they need fast train railways and, they definitely believe it is necessary to spend a lot of money to develop railway
systems
.
However
, inside the
city
transportation
 system is
also
 important for living
people
. In the
city
area
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 everyone
use
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uses
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 any transport system
at
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for at
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 least a day. If these are not developed,
people
 have become frustrated and it could be
bad
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a bad
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 impact on the economy. Undeveloped
transportation
systems
also
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are also
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barrier
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a barrier
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for
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to
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 its reputation,
people
Correct word choice
and people
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 from other countries
also
becoming
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become
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 negative. Personally, I believe authorities should give
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 importance
on
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to
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 constructing new fast railway lines and improving existing
transportation
. Both are equally important for
city
 and country economy and its living with working life of inhabitants. In conclusion,
transportation
systems
 becoming a great factor for a country,
city
 or region. Everyone heavily depends on
this
systems
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system
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,
for
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and for
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 that
reasons
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reason
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 it has to be improved.
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